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Critique my Poem and Story prologue please~~~

Please C&C these tyvm~

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Two Gods whom governed space and time created a magical world called Celelynia. Celelynia featured two different lands; each land had its own nation and culture. The lands were separated by divine means so that the Gods could monitor each race’s progress on their own.

Behold, for there are two levels in Celelynia.

The Goddess of Dawn created the land above – the tranquil, sky-faring world of Everleryn. It is where nature and peace chooses to flourish. Although the nation is not advanced in technology and means of combat, they are very content and no wars had ever occurred. Everleryn is very beautiful, sprawling across the nation are numerous waterfalls, rivers, ancient structures and mountains.

The God of Twilight created the land below – the magical and, once, breathtaking world of Agranoa. The people here were given the gift of magic and most – if not all, know it the minute they are born. Practically everyone practices magic on a daily basis, and there are many mercenaries wielding heavily enchanted weapons. In fact, some wizards have reached a level of mastery close to that of a Demi-God.

Consequently, countless wars had occurred. It is ridiculous as some wars were merely a grudge between leaders, and others were held fun or just to see who is the more competent nation. Recently, there was huge catastrophe that conjured up many evil beings. No one knows whom or what caused it or where the beings came from, but all the nations had to settle their grievances and form a global alliance.

The once glorious land is now barren and dark, riddled with a race of grotesque evil beings named the Fearean by the Arganoans. Countless raids and sieges by the Fearean occur on a daily basis. Not only that, the Fearean has plans of taking the battle to Everleryn to expand their territory.

This is a story about the adventures of a boy who grew up in Everleryn. Not just an ordinary boy – for he is the sole hope of Celelynia.
 
Again, dude, you're rockin'!

I especially like how you have that first bit as a scroll. And even the second bit, I can almost hear someone like Christopher Lee narrating it.
 

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