Character Concept: Axel Braveheart - C&C please

[Sparx-1]

So, here's what everyone's been waiting for... (At least I think they've been waiting for it...) An actual original drawing of Axel Braveheart from my "Axel and the Vengeance of Ryu" project! (Link:http://www.rmxp.org/forums/index.php?topic=43623.0)

I'm aware it's not perfect, but I just haven't noticed anything wrong with it myself. However, this is definitely Axel's most up-to-date design.

Here ya go...
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So what does everyone think?

 

[Despain]

pfffffffffffff anime

it's seriously holding you back bro. the eyes and shit just look totally off, and it's because youre trying to mimic popular anime

 

[RadethDart]

Yeah, if you were to try realistic eyes, you might have a better end result...other than that, it looks good.

 

[Diaforetikos]

I also don't see much wrong with it besides the eyes. Move away from the anime scene, it may open your boundaries a little more. Try using anatomy references for the body, just to get an idea of how it should look. Even if your details are exaggerated, they can still look believable.

Good work though. Keep it up.

 

[xinrua]

I have provided a list of what I saw about it, but then again you might not need this at all, becuase they are just pointers.

Spoiler: This is it.

What I see whats wrong with it:
Arms, Head Shape, Nose, Hair,and Definetly on the eyes!

What you need to do for fixing:

Your right arms tends to gain fat as you scroll up to the shoulders.
Your left arm seems to be smaller then the right.
If you want hime to be buff, try making him have arms the size of his legs and I don't mean in length I mean in width.


The head shape should not be so triangular in anime/manga. Especially for how big his neck is. Try to widen his right part of his face abit. Look at a anime picture of a male, and then try and copy it it untill you get the shape of it. After that you can try and draw the same thing only with your own crazy thing to it. Then soon or later you will have a Face. =)

Nose, Your nose seems to be pointy  try and curve the nose just a small bit were the point is, becuase really most people have curved noses, or at least some what pointy.

Now your hair, it seems a small bit out of head shape. Try adding a ear or something maybe that might fix it.

The eyes, you could probably do what the others said about them and you will be fine.

 


These are just my complaints.
You don't have to take these it's just some input about it, or at least what I thought.

anyway's KEEP THIS UP!!!
=)

 

[Sparx-1]

I have provided a list of what I saw about it, but then again you might not need this at all, becuase they are just pointers.

Spoiler: This is it.

What I see whats wrong with it:
Arms, Head Shape, Nose, Hair,and Definetly on the eyes!

What you need to do for fixing:

Your right arms tends to gain fat as you scroll up to the shoulders.
Your left arm seems to be smaller then the right.
If you want hime to be buff, try making him have arms the size of his legs and I don't mean in length I mean in width.


The head shape should not be so triangular in anime/manga. Especially for how big his neck is. Try to widen his right part of his face abit. Look at a anime picture of a male, and then try and copy it it untill you get the shape of it. After that you can try and draw the same thing only with your own crazy thing to it. Then soon or later you will have a Face. =)

Nose, Your nose seems to be pointy  try and curve the nose just a small bit were the point is, becuase really most people have curved noses, or at least some what pointy.

Now your hair, it seems a small bit out of head shape. Try adding a ear or something maybe that might fix it.

The eyes, you could probably do what the others said about them and you will be fine.

 


These are just my complaints.
You don't have to take these it's just some input about it, or at least what I thought.

anyway's KEEP THIS UP!!!
=)

Ah... I get your point. I've always said that I draw females better than I draw males. I'll probably just draw a new picture. Thanks for the comments anyway, guys.

 

[cactus]

I really like that stance! I think your character really comes to life on the screen. If i were to critique I'd say be careful about your jaw line, and eyes should be one eye span apart .

 

[happylemer]

i like almost everything about it, only problems i have with it are the arms, they look to thick, and the handle of the sword. It looks to short like when he swings he wont be able to hold on to it. Other then them i have no problem.I personally love anime drawings and this is no exception.
keep it up!

 

[SakuraPhoenix]

Sparx, your anatomy is improving a lot! The pose in nice and your character is becoming fleshed out. You're progressing quite fast, keep practicing and improving and applying the advice you recieve (Xinrua's pinpointed most of them) on newer pieces and maybe come back to this one and try to redo it again. Can't wait for the next composition!

 

[tofurkey]

I don't really get the feel of a name like "Axel Braveheart" from someone who looks as pipsqueaky as he does. I think Xinrua hit the nail on the head with what needs work, so take that to heart. Just to elaborate more on the arms, though, either make them smaller and define the muscles more or make his upper body and torso equivalently big.

 

[Sparx-1]

I don't really get the feel of a name like "Axel Braveheart" from someone who looks as pipsqueaky as he does.

...Yeah, that's the point. It's part of a running joke in the game that he has a very heroic and strong sounding name, but doesn't really look (or act) the part.